HEY! Rate my rock lyrics PLEASE? THIS IS MANDATORY!?

I dont realy like it :/ it seems like you tried to hard, dont try that hard itll come thats how i got lots of mine, dont try to write in one sitting, i would post some of mine but i dont want people to take em (i'm 18 my stuff i tried to do in jr high werent that good i tried to hard) and dont make things corny people wont like it. i dont know what bands you like but listen to em and youll leaern how they write i write grungy lyrics so it just depends on what bands you like